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The day is HERE! 

I'm Isabel Davis (Writing under my maiden name, Isabel Ibañez) and I'm so stinking excited to be mentoring again in the YA category this year. Back in 2015, I first entered the Pitch Wars realm as a mentee, and the following year I wanted to give back and become a mentor. This will be my fourth year mentoring for Pitch Wars, and I'm so happy to say that one of my mentees went on to score representation after the agent round (shameless plug alert: I actually think it was that month she got the offer). My other mentee went on to land a fantastic agent and then a two book deal with a big five publisher. NOT saying this is a guarantee. but wanted to mention it since Pitch Wars can get a little competitive between mentors. ;)

Some other qualifications: I majored in Creative Writing + History, have critiqued and beta read for other writers (agented, published, and not) and have gone through hefty revisions of my own manuscripts. I know how to break down a novel and build it back up again so it's at its best. It will be hard work but totally worth it when everything is all said and done. With me as your mentor, please be prepared for hard work. I want my mentee's story to be the absolute best that it can be, and I'm going to put you through the ringer. :) 

Other fun info: I'm currently hard at work editing my YA Bolivian Fantasy, WRITTEN IN STARLIGHT, the companion novel to my debut, WOVEN IN MOONLIGHT.

When I'm not writing, I freelance for various projects but I particularly love working with authors to create their promo material, branding and the like!


Here's the game plan: I'll read my mentee's MS very carefully and write up a detailed edit letter addressing the various aspects of the story that need work. This can be anything from dialogue to the world building, from character development to their emotional arcs. From there, my mentee will revise, revise, revise and then once he/she believes it's ready, I'll take another quick look and add any track comments I think necessary for another round of quick edits before the agent round. If you're game to work hard, I'm your mentor! I'll push and encourage you, always politely and never in a harsh way. And I'll always be honest with what is and isn't working. 

I'll always be available for questions. I'll respond quickly to emails and questions, twitter and any DMs. If you're game, I also like to jump on the phone and hash out any problems with the manuscript, along with doing joint brainstorming sessions. 

SHAMLESS PLUG | Interview with Christy, my past Mentee!

I thought I'd have Christy share what it was like being my mentee last year. I hope it will give you a better idea of my mentoring style. I know it looks like a lot of work, and you'll probably be exhausted by the end, but it's so worth it. I'm super committed to sharing everything I know about writing well and the publishing world. :) 

From Christy Chao: 

Working with Isabel last year was an amazing experience! She was very encouraging with comments/criticism during Pitch Wars and remained incredibly supportive throughout the querying process. During the mentoring period, she made herself available to help me improve my manuscript in every way possible! She’ll brainstorm with you, check in to make sure you’re still doing ok, offer suggestions when you’re stuck, and celebrate with you when ideas start coming together. 


When Pitch Wars kicked off, Isabel immediately sent a detailed edit letter explaining the different parts of the story she liked and the parts that needed work. Before the rewriting process began, we also had homework assignments to figure out how I was going to address these points during the revision period. This included coming up with a new title that better described the story, outlining the chapters to block out a new plot for revisions, and putting together romance sheets for the main characters. 

During this stage, we communicated through text, DMs, and a shared Google Doc we both edited (sometimes simultaneously! Hurray for color coded conversations!). Whenever I was stuck, Isabel was always there to exchange ideas with and brainstorm solutions. She had great recommendations for fixing whatever I was struggling with at the time (characters, plot points, etc). Even if I didn’t end up going in the particular route she suggested, her feedback and questions were so helpful in guiding me to that final solution! 


During the revision period, Isabel gave me feedback regularly. I began revising based on the new plot outline and sent these revisions to her in chunks. She would send me back notes (pointing out areas that didn’t make sense, asking questions, letting me know what she loved) and then we would have a detailed phone call discussing ways to improve the chapters. I have pages and pages of scribbled notes from these calls! We worked on everything from world building, character reactions, dialogue tags, sentence structure, tension, fluff cutting, character development…basically anything that needed improvement! 


Before the November showcase, Isabel read the manuscript one last time and sent a final set of comments. She helped me polish up my query, pitch, and first 200 words. Even though this was close to the end of Pitch Wars, she continued to challenge me to improve my writing/manuscript and worked extensively with me (providing quick feedback, notes, inspiration) until we were both happy with the final product. 

I learned so much from Isabel! How to revise, how to pace a story, how the publishing industry works, to name a few. Be prepared to work hard, but also be prepared for how much your writing will improve with her guidance and support! Her future mentee is a very lucky person. :) 


Squeeee! My favorite part of this blog post. 

Remember that moment in Beauty and the Beast when Belle is surrounded by rolling hills and she starts singing about wanting adventure in the great, wide somewhere? This is all me, sweet friends. I want your adventure, your far off places, daring sword fights and princes in disguise, please and thank you!

I'm seeking incredible landscapes, well drawn fantasy, captivating historical time periods, and fresh world building. Does anyone have a fairy tale retelling in the same tone as SHREK or ROBIN HOOD: MEN IN TIGHTS? Please do send my way! Do you have a story set in a desert kingdom or ice castle? YES, YES, YES. I want all the unique settings, please! 

(And here is where I reiterate my love of fairy tale retellings and historicals. GRABBY HANDS). 

SETTING: I'm the most excited about unique places that haven't been overly done. Roman servant in a palatial house? Catherine the Great's court? A YA mystery set in a theater? I LOVE epics and sweeping landscapes, where the latter is a character onto itself. I love books set in forests, deserts, and the like. Heck, I'll even take a story about your characters languishing in a frozen tundra. If you've got a story set in a non-European inspired setting, I WANT IT. 

ROMANCE: I LOVE love. I'm a sucker for these troupes: hate to love, friends to something more, will they or won't they, forbidden romance, slow-burn, and enemies to lovers. Do you have something that falls in that category? HIT SEND NOW, please and thank you! I'm ONLY interested in manuscripts that have a romantic subplot, but please no love triangles. My heart can't take them. :) 


DIVERSITY: As a Bolivian Latina writer, I think reading about different cultures enriches the reader and their perspectives. This is super important to me. I would love to get my hands on a story from a different culture/religion/background. Ottoman empire? Babylonian? Imperial Russia? The Dominican Republic? Cuba? China? Africa? Hispanic, Black, Asian? YES PLEASE, especially #ownvoices. Basically, I want to go on an adventure with your incredible world as my destination. 

HISTORICAL: I love any and all Historical tales, so if you have epic battle scenes and political powers at play between empires, PLEASE send it my way. If you have a story about the French Revolution (and kudos if it has french words in it), I WANT IT. But seriously, all of the history—I want it, no matter the era or continent. Side note: I used to want to be an Egyptologist. If you have a story about a plucky female Egyptologist...you know what to do! :) 

RANDOM LOVES: I love bounty hunters, ANTI-HEROS, Norse Mythology, shipwrecks, ninjas, everything Russia, South America, Asia, Sri Lanka, or Africa inspired (let’s be honest, i really just want all of your sweeping landscapes, please), and mysteries. One of my most favorite movies ever is PENELOPE, so if you have something that's even remotely like it—SEND IT TO ME. 

As an aside, my favorite character right now is Jude from The Cruel Prince. She's a morally grey character with clear motivations (power, protecting her brother, staying one step ahead of Cardan).  I'd love to get my hands on a character who isn't perfect, but truly flawed. In short, utterly human. I also LOOOOOOOOOVE Pride and Prejudice and I'm dying for a retelling. If you have a story set in Regency England, I'd love to look at it!  

Do you have a YA version of Sherlock Holmes but set in a non-England setting!? I'm dying for a South American version of the intrepid detective (Kudos if it's a girl sleuth). I love tough heroines, who don't just rely on their mad sword skills but on their intelligence and wit as well. I also love princesses, but lately I've been more intrigued by the people around those in positions of power—the guards, ladies in waiting, etc. I want to read about the people whose stories don't often get told. 

ALSO! I think the world might be ready for ... VAMPIRES. This is a new addition for me, and I totally love the genre, but I do want something fresh.  

In short, I'm looking to be delighted and kudos to you if you make me giggle over a clever turn of phrase. :) 

If you have anything like the following books, SEND IT MY WAY PLEASE AND THANKS!

  • Uprooted

  • Children of Blood and Bone

  • The Bird and The Blade

  • Anything by Juliet Marillier)

  • An Enchantment of Ravens

  • The Cruel Prince + The Wicked King

  • Salt to the Sea

  • Song of the Current

  • Anything by Susanna Kearsley

  • My Lady Jane

  • Enchantment of Ravens

  • Dark Days Club

  • Sky in the Deep

To make things easier, here's my YES list: 

  • Historical (I love all history and time periods, kudos if it has fantasy).

  • Fantasy

  • Adventure

  • Fairy Tale Retellings (Cannot. Stress. This. Enough!!!!)

  • Epic

  • Regency

  • Romance (as a subplot!)

  • Political Warfare/Court Intrigue a la Cruel Prince + The Wicked King

  • Arranged marriages

  • If your book is the movie PENELOPE, just send it to me and make me the happiest person on earth

  • Female friendships

  • GREAT FOOD! I can't stress this enough! When a character isn't shown eating, I get very nervous for said character. Like, all I want to do is show them where the buffet is.

And here is my NO list:

  • Erotica

  • Contemporary (I LOVE contemp, but I'm not the best mentor for it)

  • Rape (it's OK if it alludes to it but NO on screen time)

  • Dystopian

  • Science Fiction

  • Love Triangles

 If you have any questions at all, please feel free to holler at me on the twitter (@IsabelWriter09). 

Pitch Wars 2019 Young Adult Mentors' Wish Lists